The Legend of the Dragon and Phoenix Lords - Pete P. - 08-10-2014
This is a story made by me. Correct me if there are any grammatical errors or whatever. Enjoy and comment!
This story describes the legend of two ancient and sacred fighters. These lords were the protectors of the legendary Dragons and Phoenixes respectively. They were sent from the spirit world to protect the human kind. They were half-immortals and they were gaining their godish magic powers from the life forces of the Dragons and the Phoenixes.
Chapter 1: The two companions
Dragon Lord; protector of the powerful Dragons and champion of the dragon state. Kindled with the holy Dragon blood and master of the secret flame. He could turn into a dragonish creature, equal to an army. His fire energy skills made him one of the most important figures at the first war against Demon Lord Azrael.
Phoenix Lord was protecting the most sacred creature ever lived, the Phoenixes and their energy aura, from which he was gaining his extraordinary powers. He could create firen wings and flame armour magically which also made him one really unique fighter who helped at the first war against the Demons.
Chapter 2: The fallen fighters
The first war between the human and the Demons was a major factor for the spirit world to disdain. The people could not believe that the deities and the spirits weren't helping. This worsened the situation between all states, but especially between the Dragon and the Phoenix state. There were also many many misunderstandings between these two states and the war was getting bigger.
The two Lords wanted the general good, but they had dedicated theirselves to these two states. It was hard for them to communicate as well. The human tried for one last time to actually cooperate and with the help of the two lords, the war came to an end. The war ended finding these two states enemies, as they both wanted to take the credits. The two Lords were influenced by their people and this is when they started to fall.
The feelings of friendship were replaced by anger and this turned into hate. They forgot their pure goals and they started to fight each other. The battle lasted for weeks. On the one, the strength of the Dragon flame was fighting and on the other hand, the sacred power force source of the Phoenixes was fighting back. They burned forests, valleys and villages without even noticing it. When they saw what they did, it was too late. They lost the support of the human and the support of their holy beings that they were protecting. That was the era of the Dragons’ and the Phoenixes’ migration to secret land. That is how they lost their immortality and their powers.
Chapter 3: The secret Legend
By the years the people forgot them and they regarded them as a childish fairytale. Many say that they possibly died. But they Deities saw that their creations had no use to the human, so they took them back to the spirit world.
The Legend says that the Deities gave one last chance to the human. The two lords would return weakened but ready to serve their people and help them. This would take place only if both states together as one would ask for it. That would also be the era of the secret creature return.
Overlord Hunter
RE: The Legend of the Dragon and Phoenix Lords - BlazingGale - 08-10-2014
(08-10-2014, 12:42 PM)Overlord Hunter Wrote: This is a story made by me. Correct me if there are any grammatical errors or whatever. Enjoy and comment!
This story describes the legend of two ancient and sacred fighters. These lords were the protectors of the legendary Dragons and Phoenixes respectively. They were sent from the spirit world to protect the human kind. They were half-immortals and they were gaining their godish magic powers from the life forces of the Dragons and the Phoenixes.
Chapter 1: The two companions
Dragon Lord; protector of the powerful Dragons and champion of the dragon state. Kindled with the holy Dragon blood and master of the secret flame. He could turn into a dragonish creature, equal to an army. His fire energy skills made him one of the most important figures at the first war against Demon Lord Azrael.
Phoenix Lord was protecting the most sacred creature ever lived, the Phoenixes and their energy aura, from which he was gaining his extraordinary powers. He could create firen wings and flame armour magically which also made him one really unique fighter who helped at the first war against the Demons.
Chapter 2: The fallen fighters
The first war between the human and the Demons was a major factor for the spirit world to disdain. The people could not believe that the deities and the spirits weren't helping. This worsened the situation between all states, but especially between the Dragon and the Phoenix state. There were also many many misunderstandings between these two states and the war was getting bigger.
The two Lords wanted the general good, but they had dedicated theirselves to these two states. It was hard for them to communicate as well. The human tried for one last time to actually cooperate and with the help of the two lords, the war came to an end. The war ended finding these two states enemies, as they both wanted to take the credits. The two Lords were influenced by their people and this is when they started to fall.
The feelings of friendship were replaced by anger and this turned into hate. They forgot their pure goals and they started to fight each other. The battle lasted for weeks. On the one, the strength of the Dragon flame was fighting and on the other hand, the sacred power force source of the Phoenixes was fighting back. They burned forests, valleys and villages without even noticing it. When they saw what they did, it was too late. They lost the support of the human and the support of their holy beings that they were protecting. That was the era of the Dragons’ and the Phoenixes’ migration to secret land. That is how they lost their immortality and their powers.
Chapter 3: The secret Legend
By the years the people forgot them and they regarded them as a childish fairytale. Many say that they possibly died. But they Deities saw that their creations had no use to the human, so they took them back to the spirit world.
The Legend says that the Deities gave one last chance to the human. The two lords would return weakened but ready to serve their people and help them. This would take place only if both states together as one would ask for it. That would also be the era of the secret creature return.
Overlord Hunter
This is awesome :D although i think you should have added a lot more details to their powers.for example. the phoenix lord would have turned into a phoenix made out of fire in the most desperate of times, and his powerful flames rushing fro his body just like blood fro veins. ya know. give it some spice :D other than that everything is so damn awesome :D !!!!!!!!!!
RE: The Legend of the Dragon and Phoenix Lords - Pete P. - 08-10-2014
(08-10-2014, 02:05 PM)Denis Gruzmark Wrote: (08-10-2014, 12:42 PM)Overlord Hunter Wrote: This is a story made by me. Correct me if there are any grammatical errors or whatever. Enjoy and comment!
This story describes the legend of two ancient and sacred fighters. These lords were the protectors of the legendary Dragons and Phoenixes respectively. They were sent from the spirit world to protect the human kind. They were half-immortals and they were gaining their godish magic powers from the life forces of the Dragons and the Phoenixes.
Chapter 1: The two companions
Dragon Lord; protector of the powerful Dragons and champion of the dragon state. Kindled with the holy Dragon blood and master of the secret flame. He could turn into a dragonish creature, equal to an army. His fire energy skills made him one of the most important figures at the first war against Demon Lord Azrael.
Phoenix Lord was protecting the most sacred creature ever lived, the Phoenixes and their energy aura, from which he was gaining his extraordinary powers. He could create firen wings and flame armour magically which also made him one really unique fighter who helped at the first war against the Demons.
Chapter 2: The fallen fighters
The first war between the human and the Demons was a major factor for the spirit world to disdain. The people could not believe that the deities and the spirits weren't helping. This worsened the situation between all states, but especially between the Dragon and the Phoenix state. There were also many many misunderstandings between these two states and the war was getting bigger.
The two Lords wanted the general good, but they had dedicated theirselves to these two states. It was hard for them to communicate as well. The human tried for one last time to actually cooperate and with the help of the two lords, the war came to an end. The war ended finding these two states enemies, as they both wanted to take the credits. The two Lords were influenced by their people and this is when they started to fall.
The feelings of friendship were replaced by anger and this turned into hate. They forgot their pure goals and they started to fight each other. The battle lasted for weeks. On the one, the strength of the Dragon flame was fighting and on the other hand, the sacred power force source of the Phoenixes was fighting back. They burned forests, valleys and villages without even noticing it. When they saw what they did, it was too late. They lost the support of the human and the support of their holy beings that they were protecting. That was the era of the Dragons’ and the Phoenixes’ migration to secret land. That is how they lost their immortality and their powers.
Chapter 3: The secret Legend
By the years the people forgot them and they regarded them as a childish fairytale. Many say that they possibly died. But they Deities saw that their creations had no use to the human, so they took them back to the spirit world.
The Legend says that the Deities gave one last chance to the human. The two lords would return weakened but ready to serve their people and help them. This would take place only if both states together as one would ask for it. That would also be the era of the secret creature return.
Overlord Hunter
This is awesome :D although i think you should have added a lot more details to their powers.for example. the phoenix lord would have turned into a phoenix made out of fire in the most desperate of times, and his powerful flames rushing fro his body just like blood fro veins. ya know. give it some spice :D other than that everything is so damn awesome :D !!!!!!!!!!
Well, i think it would spoil the story. I had not to write details because what i want to succeed is to make it seem more mysterious and not to make someone get bored.
Thanks for the good words!
RE: The Legend of the Dragon and Phoenix Lords - User 43 - 19-10-2014
Nice story. Maybe later in the HF story,(if HF comes back into development) the demon lord is unleashed and the Dragon and the Pheonix have to ally to fight him (it probably) off. Maybe then these creatures can return.
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